show don't tell.
Kade heart was beating when he won a game of fortnite. His eyes widened they were as big as a soccer ball. The grin on his faces was giant. (shocked)
Tommy smile kept getting bigger and bigger as his eyes sparkled. His eybrows went flying up.
His face went bright pink. (excited)
Jimmy Eyes dropped and the frown on his face got bigger and bigger. (sad)
He felt rejected his eyes started bawling. (sad)
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